In the writing of essay, especially when it comes to the point of SAT, no wonder why many students struggle in examples, but rather compassions on those who need to take SAT again only because it. Examples are the one of most fundamental aspects in the essay; it makes real life expression of topic and argument. Although ironically college board usually take only one point for mis-written essay, which is clearly underestimating the vitalness of essay examples, still truth won’t change until writer change their draft.
All it begins from the little, little did he know, led him to misinterpretation. College board and other writing tutors encourage SAT takers to use personal, juvenile, but sincere examples. Such as, “I had experience of….” kinds. Issues rise from here, usually most of kids, who never thought essay seriously, -I am very sorry about you junior essay and the essays will be written- start mentioning that is totally irrelevant, or something that is more private.
Since the examples are always followed with the topic, topic here is “Discuss the importance of personal freedom in decision”, boy named Jay -not real name, of course- used an example, conflict between parents and him about private tutoring for his B+ math grade. The reason he couldn’t make 6 with his essay was, clearly misunderstanding of an example -he only mentioned about personal experience, not an EXAMPLE.
If you, yourself, are the one who reads through the essay just taken in New York for SAT, and just by the glance would have thought, “Oh, gush. He really didn’t get it.” There are two problems that this portrays. First, Jay wasn’t smart enough to think that most readers, mainly over 18 with children as parents, will not take this logical whatever, whenever he used it as example. Just think about it. You just read all the complains dealing with private tutoring for his get grade up to A-. Wow, how convincing. Second, Jay didn’t really imagined that this conflict has nothing to do with topic; if he wanted to use it as an example, either he gets more philosophical and literal about psychological damage he took from conflict -like I said, just copy the line from famous court soaps- or puts more effort on writing actual result from conflict. If his essay got 5, only because of this example, having little argument with parents over tutor, he probably could get 6 instead by putting “I got A, not A-, without tutoring.” or sort.
The reason Jay couldn’t think of it is, simply out mind doesn’t function that way while writing about personal experience. Building reference to personal experience could give impression to readers, as they agree on the writer’s right usage, but not from literal emotions. Essays don’t work that way. Essay requires to be cold-blooded, strictly logical. And so on, unless Jay is going to argue that the psychological abuse from parents led him to see his shrink, he only complained about his parents publicly, nothing more than that.
This is where we all need start seeing writing as complicated endless puzzle. There is no such shortcuts in writing, but rather hard learning. Especially when it comes to test, asking to make 5 paragraphs essay in 25 minutes with unexpected topic, only thing that aids you are either becoming A.I. or keep writing on your own. In Facebook, MySpace, Twitter, we all know the main idea, by just illustrating the portion of topic: my cat is dead, my bro is crying for days, my tutor sucks, etc. Because that’s the purpose of writing in the online; giving shot stories that would be enough to share information easier than ever. Besides, if there is a guy, asking “why are you crying when your cat is dead?”, then we all would scream and run for Sherlock, yelling at him we just found cold-blooded psychopaths who might be killing another cat next door tomorrow night. But in essay, it is completely rational and needed to think “why is he crying when your cat is dead?”. And, if you are the one who just tossed that as an example, I also hope you will say “that’s what makes us to believe human has mind.”
Examples are the the key bridge connecting the essay with our actual world. They can disprove the point, but also can strength it. That’s where we suppose to estimate example as our final defense from alien readers.